5 part paragraphs

Over most of the time when you guys were doing the paragraph readalouds I was in Leavenworth. However, I was here long enough to listen to a couple of them. From the couple that I saw, I noticed that we needed to work on our transitions. Most papers were very good, and would have been almost perfect with just a little more thought on the transitions. From seeing all of those other papers I can say that the best kinds of topic sentences, or paragraphs in general, were the ones that were written by people who had revised it and changed it many times. The people with good paragraphs had at least five different drafts and that's how you can tell which paragraphs were good or not and how to make a good one.
According to my critiques I had a unique topic but weak transitions, I also said "I" a lot. All of the negative things about my paper that I heard, I realized after hearing other people read their papers. If I would have read over it a couple more times I would have caught those mistakes and gotten a better grade. I also had a lot of plot summary. So on my next 5 part paragraph I will definitely look at and apply the criticism next time and hopefully it will be better.

Extending the stroy

The story To Kill a Mockingbird really spoke to me in a way that made me think more on how unfair people can be. Some people would rather give up an innocent person's life to follow a stupid belief. It made me think about how screwed up people can be to rape their own daughter. The story made me realize that stereotyping or judging people truly does cover up a person's true personality. A person could look like a complete weirdo with tons of piercings and a mohawk and a tattoo of a swastika on their back but they could still be nice people and you'll never know unless you give them a chance. Well, I guess if they have a swastika on their back you probably wouldn't want to talk to them at all, it tells a lot about a person. Still, give them a chance to show their true personality. I'm almost positive that people judge before they know a person but sometimes one mistake is all you get so you probably wouldn't want to take the chance with a complete stranger. Maybe try to get to know someone who you see a lot and you sort of know but not really enough to make assumptions about them. In the story almost everybody is against black people and that's not right because there are a lot of very nice black people in the story and that live around in their society and ours.

There are a lot of people who are two-faced, but that doesn't mean that they're not good people. In the story a lot of the women were always talking about how people should treat black people better but when it was time to take initiative and to do the right thing they just let it go and went with what they wanted to do not what was right. I'm sure a lot of people in today's society are two-faced whether they act differently in front of different friends or they'll act weird in front of their parents. I'm sure there's not one person who acts the exact same way in front of their friends as they do in front of their parents. I sure do know a lot of people like that. From this novel I knew that you should give people chances before you judge them like how on the story during the trial how Tom really was not guilty an everyone knew it but because of the jury who promised to be honest went against that because they assumed that Tom was a bad person or a disgusting liar. Those things could have been true but they weren't and the jury knew it to, they just didn't want to even give him a chance or look at the evidence that pointed to the truth. The trial was over before it had even began.